Read at your own risk. Bad & funny poetry done in only one draft. You've been warned!
When I read your work... Can I call it work? It seems sort of offensive to Works, in the nobler senese. I digress.When I read your words strung together in a faint semblance flirting with coherent thought, I actually smiled, because lights going on and off evoked the sound of a thumping baseline and good things like that, and I decided you were writing about a rave. Raves are a positive things.However, I don't know if you are a minor or not, or are showing this to minors, so I have to adjust the grade. C+/-
That's right. A positive things. It is not a grammatical error when you did it on purpose. Put THAT in your pipe and SMOKE IT.Also kids, smoking is bad. Unless done in a pipe. A+ to me for the socially conscious message.